Weasel you have to understand only so many commands can go into a script the way your putting them in, also using the same var more then once can cause problems.

I like that your trying to get better at scripting but posting every script you make isn't good for anyone, if you want to share your scripts with people then find a irc and tell some people. I'm sure if you ask one are two people here they can direct you to a good and helpful irc where other like you can talk all day about yours and there scripts.